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PostSubject: Re: Uber Edit Time =D   Tue Jul 31, 2012 4:42 am

Welcome back.


Good news. While you were gone, I've managed to figure out the new order of events in the timeline for each character in the first book (David's is mainly unfilled because I'm pretty much just gonna copy-paste from the current version):


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Prologue
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Jaylen dreams; shared between David and Priantos


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Chpt 1:
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[D]
-Wakes from strange dream aboard UEF Algol II
-*Stuff*
-At Dome restaurant, spots Zen'ji man staring directly at him from the undergrowth
[V]
-Comes in at end of chapter tracking the Zen'ji observing David
[K]
-Meets David aboard UEF Algol II
-Arrives in Darwin
-Training at embassy
-In restaurant with David, Steph, Kate and Donathan


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Chpt 2:
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[P]
-Priska from king; Order meeting
-Palace servant comes forward with info regarding a suspicious palace servant
-Goes to White Tower; senator falls to death
-Palace servant spy pursued; man uses suicide device
-Autopsy results of spy revealed (Brotherhood revealed)
-Private investigator (for the murdered senator) sends Priska requesting to meet in private at an Inner City cafe
-Investigator's dead body (stabbed in the back with a retractable Brotherhood skewer) found in cafe back room; investigation journal found in a secret compartment in her cloak
[L]
-*End of chapter* Arrives in Valdin
[N]
-Observes Iga'ji weapon caravan traversing the Pass of Ungush to Valieren Greyskin territory; heads back to Sanctuary
-Leaving Sanctuary northward; stops to hunt Renne


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Chpt 3:
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[D]
-*Stuff*
-On expedition, catches Viera following them; confronts
-*Stuff*
-Donathan goes missing
[V]
-Follows David, tracking Zen'ji following him
-Witnesses Brotherhood ritual;
-Speaks with village elder; identifies the men as Brotherhood members
-Watches David from treas outside Darwin; kind of falls in love
-Follows David again; caught by David following him; slips him
-Rescues Donathan from Brotherhood
[K]
-First supervised visit to Svia'ji village
-Discussion at embassy about matters in Valiero
-Visit to Valieren mine north of Darwin from where Darwin is supplied of vital minerals; experiences Goldskin/Greyskin hostility among convict mine workers


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Chpt 4:
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[P]
-King arrives back in Valdin; Palace Bay meeting thing (minus being beneath the White Tower).
-Priantos, in the meantime continues with investigation dead investigator started using info from journal
-Visits university, learns of Key of Acanthos and connection with Acanthos' burial chamber
-The Order checks out Acanthos' burial chamber just to be sure and finds the entrance sealed shut and quite untouched (which will confuse the reader, considering there'll be scenes of Lash'ir in the burial chamber) and so considers is a dead end.
-Lash'ir in Priantos' house; promises to be back the following evening
-Investigates Priska station; Priska station spy captured alive
-Priska station agent interrogation; revealed planed assassination attempt at Quabble finals.
-Priska station agent set free under hidden watch - agreed to act as double-agent in exchange for a lightened sentence.
-King/advisers meeting to discuss findings; king decides to attend; also learns for the first time of Lash'irr's newly announced betrothal to Brethin in order to secure peace between Iga and Valiero.
-Lash'irr fails to show at Priantos' house that night as promised
-Quabble finals; first evidence of mole; assassination of King averted
[L]
-Lash'irr in Valdin
-Lash'irr in Priantos' house
-Meets with Brotherhood in burrial chamber
-Takes boat out to sea to meet Iga'ji royal vessel approaching city
[N]
-Stop at Tita'ji village; helps out
-Reaches Jin; observes human activity; leaves


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Chpt 5:
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[D]
-Looks after Kate in Donathan's absence
-*Stuff*
-Finds Donathan at Viera's village
[V]
-Nurses Don
-Speaks with village elder
-Lures Brotherhood away from her village
-Sends word to Darwin about Don
-Humans comes for Don; brought to Darwin for questioning
[K]
-Tries to help with search for Don
-First visit to Valdin
-Returns to Darwin
-Accompanies party to Viera's village to retrieve Don


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Chpt 6:
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[P]
-Discussion with Jer'ij about possibility of Enforcer corruption; no evidence found; suggests possibility of them being tipped of about the investigation; just after, news of Priska station agent found dead
-Lash'irr in Priantos house; argument about Lash'irr's betrothal to Brethin (as she neglected to mention it); Lash'irr tips him off about another Brotherhood agent, the history lecturer's assistant
-Investigates history lecturer's assistant; agent captured alive with Key
-Aforementioned agent (Key taken back to Order HQ) used to lead Order to Brotherhood HQ; actually leads them astray as distraction for what happens next; taken to prison
-A poor girl is caught leaving the HQ of the Order while the above happens with the Key; she says she was hired by a man in the Under City
-The Order lets the girl return to the man, following her to him out of sight. The man is somehow alerted of their presence and flees into the Under City but takes the girl with him. That pursuit happens, only instead of capturing the man, he manages to stop Priantos from getting to him (Tiard's accidental intoxication scene still happens. There are also more Order members in this scene now, but they're held up by Tiard and the falling crates at this stage) by threatening to dump the girl in the raging waters of the Under City canals. The man laughs at Priantos for his soft heart and they have that whole Shadow/Jaylen/Jin discussion . The other Order members in the chase scene arrive just after this and the man leaps with the girl into the water. Priantos instinctively dives in afterwards and manages to save the girl without drowning and is saved by another Order member who uses his/her cloak as a rope that Priantos grabs hold of. The man disappears (with the evidence or whatever) and is presumed dead, though his body is never found
[L]
-"Arrives" in Valdin in Palace Bay via Iga'ji royal vessel; met by king's people
-Meets Brethin for first time
-Shown to her room; leaves secretly
-Has fight with Priantos about her betrothal; tips him off about historian's assistant
-Royal dinner
-Brotherhood meeting
[N]
-Heads into Valieren territory via forests in Greyskin territory
-Spies on Castle Dûzkol (where Iga'ji weapons are gathering)
-Found out by Dalthor (heir of Dûzkol house); gets him on her side


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Chpt 7:
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[D]
-*Stuff*
-Chopper crash in jungle en rout to next field expedition site
[V]
-Questioned by Kenji
-Visited by David
-Shown colony by David
-Returns to village
-Speaks with village elder
-Pursues David
[K]
-Questions Viera
-Escorts Viera in colony
-Second visit to Valdin


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Chpt 8:
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[P]
-It is now very clear that there is a mole in the Order; Priantos and Jer'ij discuss this (as well as the whole Jin thing) and decide to systematically plants stories with different agents regarding the Key's whereabouts, knowing the Brotherhood wants it
-Lash'irr visits him just outside the Order (last visit)
-Priantos catches Hylla at the location she was told the Key was; discovered as the mole, she is arrested (by Tiard)
-Hylla is interrogated and reveals a secret entrance into the burial chamber from the sewers and that she never even needed to get the key, as the Key the Order currently has is actually a fake and the the real Key was somehow already in the Brotherhood's possession (which they would need to open the sarcophagus). The Key they got back from the poor girl was actually a fake and she had already given the real key to the Brotherhood. the interrogation ends when Hylla reveals the plot to murder Aleen - at that point it happens and mass hysteria breaks out in the streets of Valdin
-The order rushes to Acanthos' burial chamber, but it's impossible to station Enforcers and guards at any of the known Under City entrances, given the chaos. They arrive too late - the Brotherhood has already left, leaving only a dying fire, remnants of a weird Shjerr'dûll ritual and an open sarcophagus with something torn out of Acanthos' corpse's grasp behind
[L]
-Spies on Brethin; found out
-Leaves during the night to pay Priantos a final visit
-Formally leaves next day
[N]
-Has left Dûzkol
-Heads to Valdin


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Chpt 9:
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[D]
-Awoken by Viera amidst wreckage; only survivors: David and Rose
-Rose killed by Brotherhood
-*Stuff*
-David/Viera moment beneath the moon; wakes up next morning holding hands
[V]
-Rescues David and Rose from wreckage
-Leads them into wilderness, away from Brotherhood
-Rose killed by Brotherhood (shot)
-Survives with David
-Has that moment beneath Biarr
[K]
-Returns to Darwin after David goes missing
-Assists efforts in search for David


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Chpt 10:
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[P]
-Hylla still refuses to co-operate and is imprisoned in the Order's HQ
-The university historian reveals that the object stolen from Acanthos' grasp was most likely the fabled Jaylen key to Jin, corresponding to the Shjerr'elikat prophecy; Jer'ij orders Priantos and Tiard to get to Jin as soon as possible
-Priantos and Tiard head to the Seilen centre just north of Valdin and flies north
-Reaches *somewhere*; too late to go further; sleeps at inn
-Continues on to Shin; held up by Greyskin hostility on arrival; Priantos manages to talk the men into letting them go; they stay the night
[L]
-Meets Nomad outside Valdin
-Meets Khazor at Knysa
-Reaches and crosses Iga/valiero border
-Military camp
-Gets on train
[N]
-Meets Lash'irr outside Valdin; learns that Priantos is on course
-Goes back north, tracking Priantos


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Chpt 11:
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[D]
-A few days later; arm in great pain
-*Stuff*
-Arm amputated; blacks out to dream
-*Stuff*
-Nears village; Viera goes to check it out; doesn't return
-Vision of Lilly
-Goes after Viera; Brotherhood encounter; rescued by Kenji
[V]
-Rest of book's survival
-Rescued by Kenji
[K]
-Gives comm links to villages David may come across
-Present at David's rescue


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Chpt 12:
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[P]
-Flies onward towards the border, now avoiding settlements (deep in Greyskin territory)
-Nomad meets Priantos in secret at night
-Cross the border
-Jin. 'Nuff said
[L]
-Reaches Dorrath (Omag capitol); ditches Khazor
-Train to Highlands edge; takes Renne further
-reaches Sanctuary; told not to pursue Priantos
[N]
-Meets with Priantos
-Encounters Greyskin rebels
-Heads east to help save potential civilian casualties of the civil war


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Epilogue
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-David wakes up back in Darwin
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PostSubject: Re: Uber Edit Time =D   Sat Aug 04, 2012 7:01 am

Sounds like fun.
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PostSubject: Re: Uber Edit Time =D   Sat Aug 04, 2012 11:47 pm

Any questions or suggestions?
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PostSubject: Re: Uber Edit Time =D   Sun Aug 05, 2012 12:12 pm

Not really, although I'm kind of wondering how the different POV's are gonna work in the chapters.
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PostSubject: Re: Uber Edit Time =D   Mon Aug 06, 2012 4:45 am

In David's chapters, there'll be an alternation between David, Viera and Kenji's points of view, while in Priantos' chapters there'll be an alternation between Priantos, Lash'irr and Nomad's points of view. Their POV's also won't be turn based, so a chapter might start with David's, switch to Kenji's, briefly go back to David before ending with a scene for Viera (which basically describes Chapter One). Does that answer your question? Smile
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PostSubject: Re: Uber Edit Time =D   Mon Aug 06, 2012 2:05 pm

Indeed, yes.
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