You may want to read this.

http://www.foremostpress.com/authors/articles/show_not_tell.html

How to Show and Not Tell

Assuming you haven't read it already, if you read it and take those points into account the overall quality of the series will improve (I'm not saying it's bad, I enjoyed reading it) and thus, chances of publishers accepting it will increase. I'll try to find more articles and such to post here as well. Anyone else feel free to post articles here as well.

Oh wow, I've really been looking for a guide like that, thanks! ^^ And I've been trying hard to fix that problem of mine in this latest uber-edit, so I appreciate this.

Edit: Actually, I've already read "show, don't tell" guides. What I really need (and what I thought that was) is a guide to how one can blend descriptions in with the story without needing to take a break from the actual story.


And moving to the Writer's chat.

TemporalV01D wrote:

Oh wow, I've really been looking for a guide like that, thanks! ^^ And I've been trying hard to fix that problem of mine in this latest uber-edit, so I appreciate this.


And moving to the Writer's chat.

Thanks. Glad I helped.

*See above edit. Sorry.


Oh, and you may want to check out the Writer's Chat's latest topics for some recap.